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Winning Writers Newsletter

January 2005

Welcome to our January newsletter.

Traveling, the anthology of winning entries from the 2nd Tom Howard Poetry Contest, is now available as a free download at:
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The Best Free Poetry Contests

Deadlines: January 16 - February 28

1/19: Poetry Society of Virginia (Student Categories) +
Individual Poems: Several small prizes for students in grades 1-12 and college. You don't have to be from Virginia to enter.

1/31: Anisfield-Wolf Book Awards +++
Published Book: Two awards of $10,000 each will be given for books of poetry and prose published in 2004. Honors books that have made important contributions to our understanding of racism or our appreciation of the rich diversity of human cultures.

1/31: Ann Arlys Bowler Student Poetry Contest ++
Individual Poems: For students in grades 6-12. Winners receive $100 and publication in Read magazine.

1/31: Jackson/Phelan Literary Awards ++
Manuscript: Honors works of poetry and prose by authors aged 20-35. For Jackson award, author must be a resident of Nevada or northern California for 3 consecutive years prior to deadline; for Phelan award, must have been born in California.

1/31: Lohmann Poetry Prize +
Individual Poems: For residents of Washington State.

2/1: Japanese Literary Translation Prize ++
Honors published and unpublished book-length translations of classical or modern Japanese literary works

2/1: Paterson Poetry Prize ++
Published Book: A work of 48 pages or more published in 2004. Publisher should submit entry.

2/1: Stan and Tom Wick Poetry Scholarship Awards +++
Individual Poems: Entrants must be undergraduates at Kent State University

2/4: Toronto Poetry Competition +
Individual Poems: Open to Canadian citizens and landed immigrants. Teens (13-18) should live or attend school in Toronto, and may enter free.

2/13: Arts & Letters Awards ++
Individual Poems, Prose, Musical Composition, Visual Art: Open to residents of the Canadian Province of Newfoundland and Labrador. Junior and senior divisions.

2/27: Lynn DeCaro Poetry Contest +
Individual Poems: Open to Connecticut high school students.

2/27: Toronto Book Awards +
Honors authors of books of literary and artistic merit that are evocative of Toronto. Total prizes of C$15,000 will be awarded.

2/28: Chistell Writing Contest +
Individual Poems and Short Stories: Theme of courage. For writers who have not yet had their poems or short stories published in a major publication.

See our complete list of free poetry contests by deadline date

Key to Ratings
Highly Recommended: +++
Recommended: ++
Neutral: +

All deadlines are postmark deadlines unless otherwise specified.

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Postmark Deadline: February 1
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Utmost Christian Poetry Contest
Postmark Deadline: February 28
C$2,700 in cash prizes are offered in our 5th annual contest, open to poets of Christian faith. Prizes are: C$1,000 first prize, C$250 second prize, C$150 third prize, 10 prizes of C$50 each for honorable mention, 12 merit prizes of C$25 each for special achievement, C$100 Young Poet's Award, C$100 Formal Poetry Award, C$100 for best rhyming poem, C$100 for best poem by a Canadian citizen, and US$100 for best poem by an American citizen. (All cash prizes in Canadian dollars except for the American Merit Award.) Four Winning Writers Awards will also be made, consisting of a year of online access to the Poetry Contest Insider database (value US$19.95). Entry fee is C$15 per poem (non-Canadian entrants please send US$15 per poem), with maximum of 7 entries per contestant. Entrants must follow contest rules and use the official entry form available at www.utmostchristianwriters.com. This contest is sponsored by Utmost Christian Writers Foundation, a registered non-profit association.


Dare to Care for a Hare Poetry Contest
Postmark Deadline: March 1
All poems must relate somehow to rabbits and be 30 lines or under. All entries considered for an anthology. No limit on number of entries. First place winner receives $250 and publication onto an artistic broadside, plus 4 copies. Second and third place winners receive 2 copies of the winning broadside. All winners will be published in the HRS newsletter and at the website. Judged by poets C.J. Sage and J.P. Dancing Bear. All proceeds to support House Rabbit Society charity. Send poem titles, name, and contact info on separate sheet; poems must not contain poet's name. Include SASE. Fee is $5 per poem or 3 poems for $12. Send poems, contact info, and check made out to Speed Bump Press to HRS Poetry Contest, 48 Avon Road, Berkeley CA 94707. For additional information see website or email padmarajaoui@netzero.com. No calls, please. Website:
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Amnesty International Poetry Competition
Entries must be received by April 30
This competition is organised by the local AI group in Reading, UK. We offer prizes of 250 pounds, 100 pounds and 50 pounds for poems of up to 40 lines (any subject). There is also a Human Rights prize of 100 pounds for poems promoting our campaign to Stop Violence Against Women, and an under-16s prize of 100 pounds. The judge is Jane Draycott. The entry fee is 4 pounds for adults (2 pounds for under-16s) and you can enter online using PayPal. For details please visit our website at:
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Special Contest Announcements

Drunken Boat's First Annual Panliterary Awards
Entries must be received by April 5
Drunken Boat, International Online Journal of the Arts, announces its first-ever Panliterary Awards. We recommend this contest. Awards of about $300 will be given in each of the following genres: poetry, fiction, non-fiction, web art, photo/video and sound. Winners will be announced at the Boston Cyberarts Festival in May 2005, will be featured in a subsequent issue of Drunken Boat, and will be invited to perform at future multimedia events and performances. Other finalists will also be considered for publication. Submit up to three works, either via email to panlitawards@drunkenboat.com or via physical mail to: Drunken Boat, 119 Main Street, Chester, CT 06412. A $15 entry fee (money order or check) must accompany all submissions, or pay online at:
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Works will be accepted as URLs of work online, as attachments (MS Word files or .jpg/.gif/.zip/.swf/.html/.mp3/.mov/.wav files), or else as hard copy, disk, or CD/DVD. Please include the phrase "Panliterary Awards" in the subject line of any email submission and do not paste text submissions into the body of the email. Drunken Boat is a non-profit organization. Email editor@drunkenboat.com for more information.


Institute for Humane Studies Spring Essay Contest
Postmark Deadline: March 1; no entry fee
Prizes of $2,000, $1,500, $750 and $250 (four) will be awarded for essays that address the question: "To what degree are the creative powers of individuals influenced by the structure of the society in which they live? What legal, social, cultural, or educational conditions would be needed to fully realize their creative powers?" IHS is a libertarian think tank. We recommend this contest, which is open to full-time students of any age (graduate students or undergraduates) during the 2004-05 schoool year and to those 25 years of age or younger as of March 1, 2005 (including high school students). See the website for additional guidelines, recommendations and information:
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Update on New Resources

This newsletter and the next will be light on new resources while we complete our new Winning Writers website. We'll do our best to make it worth your wait, and appreciate your patience.


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2005 War Poetry Contest
Postmark Deadline: May 31
We seek original, unpublished poems on the theme of war. Submit 1-3 poems, up to 500 lines in total. $3,000 in prizes will be awarded, including a first prize of $1,500. The entry fee is $12. This fee includes free online access to the Poetry Contest Insider database for three months, a $5.95 value. Submit online or by mail. For complete guidelines please see:
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Margaret Reid Poetry Contest for Traditional Verse
Postmark Deadline: June 30
The Margaret Reid Poetry Contest seeks poetry in traditional verse forms, such as sonnets and haiku. $2,000 in prizes will be awarded, including a top prize of $1,000. The winning entries will be published. The entry fee is $5 for every 25 lines. Submit online or by mail. Winning Writers is assisting with entry handling for this contest. Guidelines:
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Tom Howard/John H. Reid Poetry Contest
Postmark Deadline: September 30
Open to poems in any style, theme or genre. $2,000 in prizes will be awarded, including a top prize of $1,000. The winning entries will be published. Early submission is encouraged. The entry fee is $5 for every 25 lines. Submit online or by mail. Winning Writers is assisting with entry handling for this contest. Guidelines:
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Jendi's Critique Corner

We welcome Martin Steele to Critique Corner this month. Mr. Steele was a finalist in our 2003 War Poetry Contest. If you would like a chance to be critiqued, please email your poem to me at critique@winningwriters.com. Send the poem in the body of your email message (no attachments) and put "poetry critique" in the subject line. One submission per poet per month. Thanks!

New World
by Martin Steele

I crawled for days across the arid Indian plains
until my knee caps bled red and old scars opened
leaving irregular patterns on the hard soil,
seeking the slow flowing Ganges
and searching for silk prayer shawls in the shallow mud.
I dipped my head under the holy waters
looking across to the mouldy green and peeling orange walls
of the eroding temples. Blue saliva stains playing patterns
on the sidewalks seemed to throb and pulse
and the breast pains that I endured pumped up my stomach
into elastic balls that floated with the tides
and currents below, carrying offal and soap suds
that burnt my eyes until I ceased noticing
blank worshippers urinating on banks not so far away.
Holy men limped by and waved with crooked sticks.
Had I transgressed their holy territory and disturbed the calm
as the trees nearby vaguely stirred? I had not seen this sector before
and peeled off my clothes pronouncing that I carried no weapons
nor bibles of the New Testament.
It was only fair that I should float naked.
A holy man with black match stick legs and purple toes
strolled across my wake - the strange strains of sitar rhythms
pierced my ears and deep subterranean tunnel noises
rose to the murky surface in yellow translucent cubes.
My tattered heart tangled in the easy river flow.
My half closed eyes just above the line sought rusty river trams
or logs of debris to help me stay afloat.
But the relentless bloated soap suds burnt my tongue
as I struggled to chant select bible songs.
Laughing filled the blue air and young chocolate coated children
tugged on their garland wreaths, flinging buds and thorns
to where I swam. I choked and coughed
and slowly wore down as the muezzin
From the nearby tower mosque search lighted for
my soul. The high screams of prayers cascaded,
pushing me further down as four black hooded men
dragged me from the flow; I hoped and hoped
they would not sacrifice me in holy flames. I tried to whisper
as they held my arms that I was only looking
for love. Why brand me in sati tradition? I told them,
I know many verses off by heart from the Hindu bible
and the Bhagavad-Gita which is a Song of God. I am untouchable.
I was married to Christ. I was born on a cross.
Does it not count in this new century?

Copyright 2005 by Martin Steele


Critique by Jendi Reiter

This month's critique poem, "New World" by Martin Steele, presents an instantly recognizable character: the naive traveler who is seduced and destroyed by a culture he does not understand. This nightmare recurs often in colonial and postcolonial literature, embodying Western fears that our political dominance is neither deserved nor secure. In depicting the alien culture as a primitive destructive force, the writer can suggest both the powerlessness of Western ideals and, paradoxically, their superiority to the natives' barbaric behavior. (This theme was central to the work of 20th-century fiction writer Paul Bowles.)

The narrator of "New World" seems to have come to India on a spiritual pilgrimage. He seeks out extreme experiences that will break down the boundaries of his old self and put him in touch with a deeper reality. To that end, he immerses himself in pain, dirt and decay, violating "civilized" taboos to reach a state where another's bodily fluids are no more alien to him than his own. In his new world, even humble saliva glows in psychedelic colors, and clean and unclean elements commingle shamelessly. A silk scarf could be found in the mud; "offal and soap suds" combine in the holy river.

Yet how real is this oneness? Using the exotic culture as a tool for his own enlightenment, the protagonist fails to comprehend it on its own terms, with fatal consequences. Despite his physical self-abandonment in the first half of the poem, he is in control of the experience. He chose these privations and could turn back if he felt like it....

critique continues

This critique and contest suggestions for this poem appear in full at:
http://www.winningwriters.com/critiques/2005/0501-steele.htm

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